Countries are getting more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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It is said that countries are becoming similar to each other because of the global spread of the same
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, which are now available for purchase almost anywhere. I believe that
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modern development is largely detrimental to culture and traditions worldwide. A country's history, language and ethos are inextricably bound up in
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manufactured
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. If the relentless advance of international brands into every corner of the world continues, these bland packages might one day completely oust the traditional objects of a nation,which would be a loss of richness and diversity in the world,
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the sad disappearance of the
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manifestations
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of a place's character. What would
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a Japanese tea ceremony be without
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specially crafted teapot, or a Fijian kava ritual without
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bowl made from a certain type of
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tree bark? Let us not forget either that traditional objects, whether these be medicines, cosmetics, toys, clothes or food, provide employment for local people. The spread of multinational
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can often bring in
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wake a loss of
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, as people turn to
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the new brand, perhaps thinking it
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the one they are used to.
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eventually puts old-school craftspeople out of work.
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, tourism numbers may
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be affected, as travellers become disillusioned with finding every place just the same as the one they visited previously. To see the same
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in shops the world over is boring, and does not impeller visitors to open their wallets in the same way that trinkets or souvenirs unique to the
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particular
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but I say that local objects suit local conditions best
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and that faceless uniformity worldwide is an unwelcome and deary prospect.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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