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full time university students spend a lot of time studying.some say they should do other activities too.To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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In today's world, there is a clear discrepancy among people regarding their children having to spend more
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 studying books
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 some believe they should do other
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 apart from studies. I completely with agree
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 statement that the student has to devote an equal amount of
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 to both studies and other extra-curricular
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. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss the reasons for my belief that urge me to think in
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 way with relevant examples On the one hand, in the 21st ,century students are studying all the
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 to have a bright future and
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 some parents are pushing their children to study for a long
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 rather other spending
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 on other
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. Because of
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, it can lead the students to have some health problems.
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, One of my sisters always study hard during her school life to get a seat in a good college and she doesn't like to spend
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 with others
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 she doesn't much talk.
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, studying books for a long
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 lead her to obesity
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 mental stress because she was not able to go to school constantly.
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, it is important to concentrate on other
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 as painting , playing games with others, swimming and so on. Because it builds up the confidence level
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 it teaches how to work in a team
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 playing the team sports
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 as cricket, volleyball, baseball etc. The foremost reason it keeps them physically and mentally fit and
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 it increases their concentration level. To summarise, in my point of ,view those who are spending an equal amount of
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 both studying books and in other
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 as sports will have a healthy life. And
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, parents and teachers can guide their children to have a beautiful life.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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