The diagram below shows the process of producing smoked fish.

The diagram below shows the process of producing smoked fish.
The diagram illustrates the
process
of producing smoked
fish
.
Overall
, the
process
is made by 14 stages, and it starts from catching
fish
to being finished
as
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selling. As can be seen from the diagram in detail, we can catch the
fish
and transport them to the port. After that, freeze them and thaw them to put them in water. Cutting the
fish
to
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open and putting them in salt water and making them coloured yellow.
The next step is
smoking the
fish
.
This
process
is about making smoked
fish
so the smoking part will be the most important
process
. Put the smoked
fish
in the box and freeze them at 0 Celsius. Storing them in the cold and distribute them to the
fish
shop. In the end, the final stage is selling these smoked
fish
.
To sum up
, the big part of making smoked
fish
is transporting them in fresh by freezing them because
this
process
needed more than twice, smoking part has no doubt to be important, and all of
this
process
is to sell them in the
fish
shop,
therefore
we can say it is the goal to producing smoked
fish
.
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