Many people around the world use social media everyday to keep in touch with other people and get news events. Do you think the advantanges outweigh the disadvamtages?

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We are living in the age of technology. Everything is at our fingertips now.There used to be a time when movies or new TV shows made in the West would take months before they would be broadcast in the East,

however

nowadays, cinema gets released at the same time all that to OTT platforms. To consume, there is no dearth of content. Social

media

especially has shown us that we don't always need a crew of a TV show or telly film to create entertainment. All it takes is a phone and connectivity to the internet. Though, in the

last

decade or two, social

media

has made a soaring jump in people's lives,

however

, it was only during

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that social

media

was the only thing keeping the world connected. People were able to share their lives in the form of vlogging. COVID-19

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made a lot of careers as well and a lot of entertainer or social

media

influencers found their audience and got almost instant fame. The virality of internet content is insane. In my opinion,

however

, the negative impact of

this

speed is equally fatal. With the introduction of 10-

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clips, the attention span of people all across ages is declining by the day. There is no wall to protect various age groups from discussing age-inappropriate topics. Which will only make it difficult for young adults to manage their place in society. The worst of it all is the fact that global news is at our fingertips. With crime, war, and famine happening all around, the visuals are

also

now evident. It only brings about a sense of helplessness.

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task response

Present a more articulated opinion on whether advantages outweigh disadvantages in the introduction and conclusion to guide your essay, ensuring the reader understands your stance from the start.

task response

Develop each point with more specific examples. For instance, mention particular social media platforms or phenomena to give concrete backing to your arguments.

coherence cohesion

Make sure each paragraph clearly connects back to the question, indicating whether it discusses an advantage or a disadvantage, and how it affects the overall balance of your argument.

task response

Your essay contains diverse points about the impact of social media, covering both educational and societal aspects.

coherence cohesion

Transition between ideas is smooth, notably how you connect the past with the present context of social media during COVID-19.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

272 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

to connect with friends and family
to preserve bonds
real-time updates
a wide range of perspectives
global happenings
business opportunities
networking opportunities
mental health issues
unrealistic portrayals of life
privacy breaches
identity theft
addiction
time management
productivity

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Many people around the world use social media everyday to keep in touch with other people and get news events. Do you think the advantanges outweigh the disadvamtages?

Fully explain your ideas

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