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The table below shows key data on the demographics of four different countries.

The table below shows key data on the demographics of four different countries.
The given table illustrates the information on the demographics of four different regions
such
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 as
China
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,
Russia
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, the
USA
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, and the
UK
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. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that
China
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 is the biggest number in the population,
while
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 the
UK
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's average life expectancy is the highest figure compared to the other countries. As for America, GDP is the largest difference in the graph.
Firstly
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,
China
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 is the only country with over a billion people at 1,357,000,000, followed by the
USA
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 significantly lower than it at 318,875,000.
Russia
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 and
UK
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 which is the least population, are the next numbers at 143,986,000 and 64,937,000 respectively. In terms of GDP, the leading number is the
USA
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 at 53,681, and the
UK
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 showed a broadly similar trend at 41,787.
However
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,
Russia
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 is two times as popular as
China
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.
Secondly
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, the
UK
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 is dominating average life expectancy at 81.5,
on the other hand
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,
China
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 and
Russia
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 are almost the same at 75.2 and 72.3 numbers respectively.
Lastly
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, the
USA
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 is the smallest figure in the table at 69.2.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words china, russia, usa, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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