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Some parents think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will provide better care for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Most guidances opine that letting their lineage with childcare centres is an appropriate way of pre-school age,
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, the other side mentions that they should let their grandparents take care of the children. I totally disagree with both opinions. On one hand, working parents decide to choose childcare centres to take care of the lineage because they don’t have enough time to spend with their children and the preschool session is an important period for the offspring to learn primary skills
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 as walking, reading and speaking so
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 place can teach these lessons.
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,understanding the growth process will increase the offspring’s capability,
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, the existence of a professional will help the parents
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 they aren’t available to discover by themself.
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, regardless of the growing process, the other side mentions that safety is very important. Despite the existence of professionals,
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, they can’t identify everyone’s personality so they opine that family members
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 as grandparents will serve as another alternative solution.
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, the grandparents are the ones who know their personality so they can genuinely trust them to take better care of the offspring. In conclusion,
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 of a variety of solutions, I think that the parents should look after themself because
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 period is the time that they will see their own son develop and learn.
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 they have to work many days. Childcare centres can’t guarantee that the growth procession will go in a fantastic way so they should discover and look after themself.

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