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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
The line graph illustrates medium carbon dioxide (co2)emission per human in the United
Kingdom
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 ,
Sweden
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,Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007 .
Overall
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,The number of cases in the Uk was more than in
Sweden
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 and Italy , and
also
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 in
Sweden
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 until it reached ,Italy was just below Portugal,the number of cases in Portugal had the lowest numbers of the period .
According to
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 the average carbon dioxide (,co2) emissions it is noticeable that there is a development in the United
Kingdom
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 in 1967 was rate peaked at approximately 11 per
cent
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 and roughly 9 per
cent
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 in
Sweden
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 and just below 4.2 per
cent
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 in Italy
while
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 in Portugal recorded around 1 proportion,United
Kingdom
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 was rate remind stable at 1977 but Regarding the given data, it is remarkable that there is a leap in
Sweden
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 around 10.2
percentage
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also
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 Italy had to rise to roughly 6.2 degrees
while
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 in Portugal approximately 2 per
cent
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. In United
Kingdom
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 and
Sweden
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 were experienced a downward trend in 1987 the
percentage
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 Uk 10 and
Sweden
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 per
cent
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 8 ,whilst in Italy just below was around 6.2 per
cent
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 and Portugal was 4 per
cent
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 ,Uk continued to decline steadily to the end of
the
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the the
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 period 1997,2007 per
cent
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 around 9 ,like that
Sweden
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 was 6 per
cent
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 in 1997 and around 5 the
percentage
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while
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 Italy and Portugal had each increased in 1997 ,2007 for Italy was roughly 7 the
percentage
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 whilst Portugal was just over 5 the
percentage
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kingdom, sweden, cent, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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