When we meet someone for the first time, we generally decide very quickly what kind of person we think they are and if we like them or not. ls this a good thing or a bad thing?

It seems natural for
people
to judge
others
according to
their outlooks or
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first
glance and decide whether to make
friends
with them. I partially agree that
this
judgement can benefit us and
also
think it can sometimes cause problems. Making a quick
judgemenr
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judgement
judgment
of other
people
can be beneficial by allowing efficiency.
That is
because
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personality of
people
, as they choose them
according to
their personal preferences and show their interests and tastes in purpose when they purchase those clothes.
Therefore
, if we use
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first
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to decide whether or not we like them, we can save our
time
by spending it on
people
who have the largest possibility
to become
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our
friends
without wasting
time
on socialising with them and assuring again that we dislike them. In
this
way, we can have more
time
and energy for other essential things,
such
as accompaniment to loved family members, taking parenting responsibility or fulfilling daily tasks. Thinking Fast and Slow, a famous psychological book, made a great explanation about
this
behaviour by saying that there are two systems in our brains. One is for fast processing of information
such
as judging
people
by their outlooks, and the other is to slowly think about things with a comprehensive consideration. And both of these two systems work together in our daily lives which is decided by genes.
On the other hand
, it may cause discrimination if we only depend on our
first
glance to decide our relationships with
others
.
That is
because
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a complex creatures which cannot be directly known in a short period,
instead
, we all have
the
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experiences with our
friends
when we find
us
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understand less about them even though we have known
others
for a long
time
, which means patience is the key factor to establish long-term connections with
others
. If the
first
impression is accurate, problems
such
as being betrayed by
friends
or cheated by partners could never happen.
Therefore
, even though the
first
glance can sometimes help us to save
time
, it is still worth
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more
time
to
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getting
along with
people
that we dislike because of their outlooks, and it may provide some opportunities for us to step out of our comfort zones and know a new group of
people
we can never imagine before.
For instance
, Bill Gaze gave a great example of
this
by his own experience. He and his best friend, Tom, had the chance to know each other
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a high school party and he said Tom made a bad impression
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him by wearing a dress.
However
, as they get to know each other
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, Bill
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Tom a genius in computer with a great sense of humour. In conclusion, from my perspective, it is reasonable for
people
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others
at
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the
first
time
they meet them because it can be efficient in
this
way
,
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while
using a relatively longer period to get to know
people
before any judgement can
also
be worthy, and it is up to the individual to decide which approach can be the suitable one for them.
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Your essay demonstrates a good understanding of the topic and presents both sides of the argument effectively. However, ensure that you clearly present your position in the introduction and address both perspectives in the body of the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay is generally well-structured and uses a variety of cohesive devices. Make sure to use more transitional phrases, such as 'in addition', 'moreover', and 'furthermore', to improve the overall coherence of the essay.

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