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Some students take one year off between finishing school and going to university, in order to travel or to work. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages

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A
gap
year
 is a
year
 after high school when a
student
 takes time to explore his or her interests, which usually entails some type of travelling or working. After the
gap
year
 is over, the
student
 begins his or her career. It has both pros and cons, which I shall discuss in
this
 essay. I, personally believe that the benefits of '
gap
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year
 outstrip the drawbacks. There are many benefits of taking a
year
 off.
Firstly
, the
student
 can explore his interests before deciding on a major. Just passing out of secondary school, a
student
 does know what his real interests are. A
gap
year
 gives him time to introspect and he may
also
 find something he has never considered studying before.
Secondly
, he can save money to finance his
education
 and ease some burden off his parents' shoulders. Higher
education
 is very expensive and some parents cannot afford the full cost of students' university fees.
Furthermore
, during
this
year
, the
student
 meets different people and experiences different cultures.
As a
result
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 his personality develops and he comes to know about the outside world.
Finally
, a well-planned
gap
year
 is attractive to some admissions tutors and
to
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future employers.
For example
, a
student
 can add his activities of the
gap
year
in
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to
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 his resume when he applies to the university, or for some job after completion of his
education
.
This
 is taken in a positive light by the admissions committee and some job providers. As every garden has weeds,
similarly
 a
gap
year
also
 has a downside. A
student
 may find it difficult to get back to study. A
year
 is a long time and once that tempo of attending classes and doing
home-work
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 etc. is lost, a
student
 may not feel like studying again.
Secondly
, if he starts earning enough,
education
 may seem unimportant
Finally
, if a
student
 doesn't plan it properly, it may end up as a wasted
year
.
To sum up
, a
gap
year
 has a lot of advantages provided it is planned well.
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