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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What are the factors that contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

As the majority of adults spend most of their time at
work
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, being content with their
career
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careers
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 is a crucial part of their health and happiness.
This
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 essay will first discuss how being respected and well paid
contribute
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contributes
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 toward
job
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 satisfaction and
then
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 suggest that expecting everyone to be happy with their career is unrealistic because many people’s circumstances force them to
work
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 in unfulfilling jobs. One factor that leads to people being satisfied with their
job
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 is being treated with respect. If employees feel that their managers appreciate them and the
work
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 they do, it gives them a sense of ownership and they enjoy their
work
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 more because their contributions matter. A fair salary and benefits are
also
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 important considerations. If workers feel they are being underpaid, they will either resent their bosses or look for another
job
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. In
Myanamr
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Myanmar
,
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, the most cited reason for leaving a
job
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 was an inadequate salary. I do not think it is feasible to expect everyone to enjoy their
work
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 because many people have no other choice but to do jobs they do not like. Attaining a rewarding
job
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 usually requires a good education, which many people cannot afford. The result is that they end up working in unsatisfying roles just to be able to survive. An example of
this
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 is workers in sweatshops or factories, who cannot quit their terrible jobs because they are unable to secure better employment
elsewhere
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. In conclusion, being satisfied at
work
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 is an important part of a person’s
wellbeing
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well-being
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, and respect from management and fair pay can improve one’s level of happiness.
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,
job
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 satisfaction for all workers is an unrealistic prospect because circumstances make it impossible for everyone to have a rewarding
job
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.

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task achievement
You have presented a well-rounded argument and addressed both parts of the prompt clearly. However, consider providing a few more specific examples or statistics to strengthen your points.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear and logical structure, and the paragraphs are well-organized. Ensure each paragraph flows smoothly into the next by using more varied linking words and phrases.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are well-defined, setting up the essay and rounding it off effectively.
coherence cohesion
The main points are well-supported and effectively argued, providing clear reasons and examples for your claims.
task achievement
You have completely and clearly responded to the task, covering both factors that contribute to job satisfaction and the feasibility of job satisfaction for all.
Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • wellbeing
  • contribute
  • meaningful work
  • work-life balance
  • career progression
  • workplace environment
  • recognition
  • constructive feedback
  • compensation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • autonomy
  • skills match
  • interests match
  • variety
  • challenge
  • economic conditions
  • labor market
  • individual expectations
  • job role
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