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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside . Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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The majority of people believe that cities are the best area to live,
while
 others say that it is preferable to live in the countryside.
This
 writer is of the opinion that the former choice is the best option. The reason why I agree with the former choice is that living in cities can find a job to earn money easily. To explain, citizens who
in
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 these places have qualifications will gain more business opportunities or career advance.
As a consequence
, people have a well-paid job to feed themselves and take care of their families more fully.
However
, living in an urban area is always bus and do not have time to rest.
In addition
, they feel exhausted, tired and pressured
with
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 pollution in these places
such
 as air, water and noise pollution. Another point worth considering is that having a
life
 in the countryside can enjoy the great things in
life
.
This
 is because living in a rural area helps individuals breathe in the fresh air without too much exhaust from vehicles and they do not need to work too much because there is not too much work to do.
As a result
, they will not pressure
with
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 money or anything and they enjoy a leisurely
life
 without any difficulty.
Besides
, living in these places, they do not have any job promotions in the future and education is
also
 developing more slowly than in the city . Taking everything into account, living in cities has a variety of benefits because they gain more business opportunities and find a good career useful for the future.
Hence
,
this
 essay has clearly demonstrated that the right to do to support having
life
 in the city is necessary.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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