In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who do this.

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who have not graduated their high
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to travel or work before they head towards
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, brings benefits or not, is questionable nowadays. Personally, I believe that both travelling and working are of great importance for
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between
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and
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period, so I will clarify my opinion in the essay below providing some demerits at the same time. Undoubtedly, finishing high
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means that
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are expected to experience
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new atmosphere in the upcoming future at the
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of their choice, and working
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their field or having a trip to about for educational purposes
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chance for
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to both not experience culture shock, get on with new coursemates. If
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are not ready to adapt to the new pace of life at
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, they will get stressed from the very beginning of
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, missing their families and suffering from
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the self-isolation
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of strange people. Vice versa,
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who have
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worked or experienced
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, totally new atmosphere for themselves, are collaborative and flexible,so they will not have trouble
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catching up with
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pace in their
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life.
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, there are faced some cases when
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find a job of great profit in the process of working and end up
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not studying at the
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thinking that having
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or not does not make sense in the long run. Unfortunately,
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of
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kind will regret after realising that the more academic achievements and documents, the higher the possibility is to be promoted.
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,
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situation is when some
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travel abroad and find
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a part-time
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manual job that does not demand
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. These type of
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' main concern becomes money and, ultimately, as
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time goes
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understand that
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should not be attracted by the limited period of richness.
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but not
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least, despite some demerits I have mentioned above, I believe the benefits
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to work and travel before entering the
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, prioritizes
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its pros, but additional special courses by teachers at schools should be
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to give pertinent direction for every learner. Thanks to these courses,
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will begin to learn to take advantage of working or travelling in the right way In conclusion, working and
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experience before finishing
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and in the upcoming period of entering the
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is invaluable as it helps
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to be fully prepared for the expected obstacles of their new lifestyle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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