The graph illustrates the number of birth which happens from 1920 till 2020 in China and in the USA

The graph illustrates the number of birth which happens from 1920 till 2020 in China and in the USA
The graph illustrates the comparison between the
university
campus in 2010 and the
university
campus now.
Overall
it is clear that
the
university
offices and shop have been transformed into
same
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the same
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building
whereas
the lawn area completely vanished since now.
However
, the lake appears to have been left unchanged.
Firstly
the
university
campus has been changed a lot in the previous years but Lake is the only place which remained without any amendments
whereas
the student accommodation which was located on the west corner has been enlarged because of increasing recruits and a new accommodation building
also
appeared on the opposite side on the east side.
Secondly
,the Science and art faculty were in the same building in 2010 but now they are both in different buildings .
Similarly
,the new student building is actually
the
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a
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combination of offices,shops and restaurants which were far from each other in 2010 but now all are under the same roof.
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