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The graph illustrates the comparison between the

university

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campus in 2010 and the

university

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campus now.

Overall

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it is clear that

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the

university

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offices and shop have been transformed into

same

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the same

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building

whereas

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the lawn area completely vanished since now.

However

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, the lake appears to have been left unchanged.

Firstly

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the

university

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campus has been changed a lot in the previous years but Lake is the only place which remained without any amendments

whereas

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the student accommodation which was located on the west corner has been enlarged because of increasing recruits and a new accommodation building

also

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appeared on the opposite side on the east side.

Secondly

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,the Science and art faculty were in the same building in 2010 but now they are both in different buildings .

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,the new student building is actually

the

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combination of offices,shops and restaurants which were far from each other in 2010 but now all are under the same roof.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words university with synonyms.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

153 words

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The graph illustrates the number of birth which happens from 1920 till 2020 in China and in the USA

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