Society is based om rules and laws.If individuals were free to do whatever they want to do,it could not function To what extend do you agree or disagree with the above statement?
In modern societies,
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the
law
is the structure of is organisation and is tipically
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typically
though
that individual freedom will lead to Correct your spelling
thought
chaotic
community. As far as Correct article usage
a chaotic
I’m concern
an equilibrium between Change the verb form
I’m concerned
this
two points of view it’s important for the correct function of a state or country. Correct determiner usage
these
Usually
when Add a comma
,Usually
law
is more important than Add an article
the law
a law
the
individual Correct article usage
apply
rights
the result is a dictatorship. In
the other hand, when individual Change preposition
On
rights
overuled
the Correct your spelling
override
law
, an
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apply
anarqy
could be created.
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anarchy
energy
Firstly
let’s analyse what happen
to a society when Change the verb form
happens
law
is more important than freedom. For instants in Nicaragua we could see how today through special powers given by the law
to the president, human rights
(like legal
judicial process) of criminals are been Correct article usage
the legal
denyed
. Even though criminals represent a great danger to a community they have the right to use their Correct your spelling
denied
constitucionals
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constitutional
constitutionals
rights
. Therefore
, the law
shouldn’t be over the right of the individuals
, because this
could take the country into a dictatorship.
Secondly
, let’s talk about when the individuals
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individual's
rights
overtake the law
of the state. For
example
what’s happening today in the United Add a comma
,example
states
about the gender disputes. A trans person, even though Capitalize word
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it
has the right to express himself Correct pronoun usage
he
she
it
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in
what ever
manner he likes, he/she shouldn’t go over other Correct your spelling
whatever
peoples
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people's
rights
. Thus
, there should be respect for the law
by members of the society.
In conclusion
I consider that there should be an equilibrium between the power of the Add a comma
,conclusion
law
over the individuals
, and a
respect of the Remove the article
apply
law
by the individuals
. This
to
prevent both, a dictatorship ( excess Add a missing verb
is to
law
), an
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and
a
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an
anarqy
( excess of freedom).Correct your spelling
anarchy
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
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