Society is based om rules and laws.If individuals were free to do whatever they want to do,it could not function To what extend do you agree or disagree with the above statement?

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In modern societies,
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law
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is the structure of is organisation and is
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that individual freedom will lead to
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a chaotic
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community. As far as
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an equilibrium between
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two points of view it’s important for the correct function of a state or country.
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when
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law
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the law
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is more important than
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individual
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the result is a dictatorship.
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the other hand, when individual
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overuled
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override
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,
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anarqy
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anarchy
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could be created.
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let’s analyse what
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to a society when
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is more important than freedom. For instants in Nicaragua we could see how today through special powers given by the
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to the president, human
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(like
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judicial process) of criminals are been
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denied
. Even though criminals represent a great danger to a community they have the right to use their
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constitutional
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.
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, the
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shouldn’t be over the right of the
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, because
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could take the country into a dictatorship.
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, let’s talk about when the
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individuals
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rights
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overtake the
law
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of the state.
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what’s happening today in the United
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about the gender disputes. A trans person, even though
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he
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has the right to express himself
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what ever
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whatever
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manner he likes, he/she shouldn’t go over other
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people's
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rights
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.
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, there should be respect for the
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by members of the society. In
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I consider that there should be an equilibrium between the power of the
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over the
individuals
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, and
a
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respect of the
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by the
individuals
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.
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to
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prevent both, a dictatorship ( excess
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),
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a
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anarqy
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anarchy
( excess of freedom).
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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