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Many people find it difficult to speak in front of and to present to anaudience. It is believed that this skill should be taught in school. Why is this important? To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

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 a lack of confidence and poor
communication
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skills
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, it is challenging for many people to speak in
front
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 of an audience. Because of
this
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, it is suggested that
schools
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 should teach
students
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 how to communicate effectively in
front
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 of the public, so that, when they grow they would feel confident in public speaking. I completely support
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 suggestion to train
students
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 for public speaking because of its various benefits. There are various occupations
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 as teachers, politicians, anchors, managers, or union leaders who have to speak in
front
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 of others to fulfil their day-to-day job duties. If they feel shy or nervous in
front
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 of others, they will not succeed in their respective fields, in spite of holding good knowledge in their area of service.
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, if a
teacher
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 is not confident to speak in
front
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 of the
students
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, a
teacher
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 cannot teach
students
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 effectively. Even though a
teacher
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 would be well educated, acquiring deep knowledge in a particular subject,
fear
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 of facing an audience may degrade a
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's
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 teaching efficiencies, resulting in ineffective teaching.
An effective
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communication
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 is an important skill to connect with others and to perform various job duties,
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, it will prove beneficial if
schools
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 add
communication
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 subjects to their school curriculum, and eventually,
students
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 will be able to pursue their careers in the area of their interests in the future as they would not have
fear
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 of public speaking.
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, as a child, a learner can acquire
skills
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 easily. Once a learner has matured enough, it would be difficult for him to get rid of his
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to present
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of presenting
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 themselves publically.
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,
schools
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 are the best option to learn
such
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 important
skills
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. In conclusion, communicating with confidence without any
fear
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 and nervousness, is a significant demand in various job fields,
thus
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, it should be mandatory in
schools
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 to build
such
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 interactive
communication
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skills
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 in
students
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, ensuring their bright future.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to connect your ideas better and use linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally' to guide your reader through your essay.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which is good for structure.
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Your examples about teachers and public speaking are relevant and help support your points.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Articulate
  • Oratory
  • Elocution
  • Persuasive communication
  • Rhetorical skills
  • Eloquence
  • Confidence
  • Stage presence
  • Audience engagement
  • Non-verbal communication
  • Public discourse
  • Persuasion techniques
  • Presentation skills
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Diction
  • Anxiousness
  • Introversion
  • Curriculum integration
  • Subject mastery
  • Communication aptitude
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