Advertising has become an unavoidable part of everyone's lives. Some people say that advertising is positive part of our lives while others say it is a negative one. Discuss both views include your opinion.

In these modern
days
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every corner of our lives is filled with
advertisements
.
Advertisements
come in various form, from our
smart phone
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to billboards on the streets,
it
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and it
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is constantly grabbing our attention. In
this
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we will look into people who believe
advertisements
enrich our
live
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and the other group who thinks it causes more harm than good. On the good side, products need to be able to reach
to
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apply
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the public in order to gain popularity and create demand for it. A great product is wasted if it is left undiscovered.
For example
, without advertising a beautiful and reasonably priced property will be difficult to reach
to
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potential buyers. Productive
advertisements
results in higher revenue.
This
helps businesses to thrive and ultimately
driving
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the greater economy. Despite the benefits
advertisements
bring, there are some downsides to it
such
as excessive advertising causes spending to increase.
Specifically
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many of the spending are unnecessary, lying on
basis
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of wanting to have rather than actually needing it. People spend most of their income and many even overspent.
According to
statistics, bankruptcy cases
due to
high credit card debt are on the rise.
Not to mention
, with these
advertisements
constantly grabbing our attention, it can be distractive and
reducing
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our
overall
productivity as well. In conclusion, after weighing both
side
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of the
coins
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I believe
advertisements
bring more benefits than harm. It is vital and has become part of our daily lives. To make the best of it, individuals should analyse the information received from
advertisements
and make
inform
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informed
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decision
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decisions
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for purchases.
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