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Some people think that teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Other think adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities

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In the Ultra-modern world, youngsters are very active and matured to achieve anything. Owing to
this
 few say that the teenage years are the most blissful of most of their
life
while
 others do not share the same opinion. Nowadays, adults are happier to have all kinds of handy facilities as they expect.
However
, In the competitive world, their mindset is changed to focus on their career
along with
 extra responsibilities to get a better
life
 for themself
as well as
 their family members. There are many reasons why adults play a key role in multitasking.
Firstly
, the thought process of youngsters is changed to become more humble and responsive to contribute their effort through physical, social and financial.
For instance
, the students who are studying abroad are doing part-
time
 jobs on a day-to-day basis
along with
 academic sessions to support financially to their families.
Secondly
, taking the initiative in each aspect to bring happiness by involving any family occasions, festival celebrations and helping others.
Finally
, They know the
time
 management skill how to utilize and when and where to spend to get valuable output.
On the contrary
, some societies believe that the teenage years are the happiest
time
 during people's
life
. To being with, there is no
such
 pressure or key responsibilities belonging to adults in high societies in terms of earning, and being socially engaged.
Therefore
 they get enough
time
 to do anything that they want without any hesitation.
In addition
, Parents put their effort to fulfil all the requirements when needed. To put it in a nutshell, it is true that the
life
 of teenagers is very joyful without any distractions.
Nevertheless
, I strongly opine that adult should use their precious
time
 very mindfully and carefully to keep themself motivated and independent and spread happiness to others.
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