Society is based om rules and laws.If individuals were free to do whatever they want to do,it could not function To what extend do you agree or disagree with the above statement?

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Imprisonment is, sadly, an inseparable part of society and it plays an important role to keep

people

safe. But there is a problem that a lot of humans who come out of jail continue committing

crime

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essay will look into

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issue and suggest that the right rehabilitation process could help to solve it. Nowadays imprisonment does not put a lot of effort into changing a

person

way

of thinking, and

as a

result

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that

person

knows no other

way

of living than

crime

. Some

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the

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people

commit

crime

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at a very young age

due to

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inability to teach them the proper

way

of living. As that

person

stays in

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prison for a long time and gets no new skills,

nor

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knowledge of lawful life, when he or she comes out, finding a job becomes a huge problem. Without proper aim in life and no knowledge where to

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it is not that hard to come back to the only thing they know –

crime

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, there are many examples of successful rehabilitation and

rise

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of previously imprisoned persons. Right mental work and

acquisition

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of new skills help

people

to return back into society as a new

man

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men

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. Some of the European countries, like Norway and Netherlands successfully use these techniques and

as a

result

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have very low

level

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crime

. Even when

people

located

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in prisons, they already start to think about the future and how to change it for the best. In my opinion,

this

is the best

way

to not just punish the

person

, but teach them how to live a better

way

and be a valuable part of society. In conclusion, it is heed to be said that the best

way

to fight

crime

– is to prevent it. But if it

is already happened

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people

needn’t

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be lynched like

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wild

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animals

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, but treated as

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human

being

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and given a chance to fix a mistake they made.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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