some people think it is better to make more money rather than have free time, while other perfer to have more free time rather than making money. discuss both view and give your opinion.

#people #money #time #perfer

According to

me, both are important, making more money rather than having free

time

as well as

having more free

time

rather than making money. My viewpoint and

also

my opinion

are

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described in the below information.

Firstly

, when

the

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apply

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people have free

time

they should earn rather than setting and

having

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have

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fun. If the person will earn

then

it will be benefited to her. Spending more and more free can make a woman unhealthy. If a woman will work more and more

than

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then

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it will help to serve more and more in the family income. If a human will get more and more work

than

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then

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will help them to spend more and more on goods and

serives

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services

. If a human will be employed

then

it will be even helpful to the nation.

For example

, a mother going to work other than spending free

time

can help the family a lot.

However

, it is even important to give free

time

to own. If a person will get some free

time

then

he can be more and more peaceful. If a man will spend free

time

with friends and family

then

it will

helpful

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help

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to grow

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the idea

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idea

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and the nation. If a human will have

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apply

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free

time

then

can think about

also

many things like health, body, self-development, helping others and much more.

For example

, if a girl will spend her free

time

with herself

then

she will more and more about even self-growth at that

time

insured in working

time

To conclude

, as described in the above information about having equal benefits for working in free

time

to having more free

time

. The above data describe my viewpoint. The given data explain my opinion.

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