IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

The pie chart show which type of transport society is prefer most in Edmonton and table demonstrate what’s reason for using the car in city

The pie chart show which type of transport society is prefer most in Edmonton and table demonstrate what’s reason for using the car in city
#show #type #transport #society #edmonton #what’s #reason #car #city
The pie chart
show
Change the form of the verb
shows
show examples
 which type of
transport
 society is
prefer
Wrong verb form
preferred
show examples
 most in Edmonton and
table
Correct article usage
the table
show examples
demonstrate
Correct subject-verb agreement
demonstrates
show examples
what’s
reason
Add an article
the reason
a reason
show examples
 for using
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
car
 in
city
Add an article
the city
show examples
.
Overall
,
car
Add an article
the car
a car
show examples
 is mostly using
transport
 in comparison with other carriers ,
whereas
,
reason
Correct article usage
the reason
show examples
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
 it is
commonly
Change the word
common
show examples
 to commute to work.
Firstly
,
pie
Correct article usage
the pie
show examples
 chart
illustrate
Change the verb form
illustrates
show examples
 that most using
transport
 is
car.
Correct article usage
the car.
show examples
45% of the
people
 prefer to commute by
car
. The second most popular form of
transport
 is Light Rail Transit .Just over
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
one third
Add a hyphen
one-third
show examples
 of inhabitants voted
to
Change preposition
for
show examples
 LRT,
while
 busses and taxis are the main
sort
Change the noun form
sorts
show examples
 of
transport
 for the rest
people
. Surprisingly , just over
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
half of
people
using
Wrong verb form
use
show examples
 a
car
 to commute to work .
Also
Add a comma
,Also
show examples
 it is used a lot for business or taking children to school goals. Only 15% 0f drivers
applying
Wrong verb form
apply
show examples
 to shopping and ,
similarly
 15% of
people
using
Wrong verb form
use
show examples
 it for leisure activities for their pleasure.
Submitted by dnm.best on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, car, people with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: