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Poor nutrition and obesity is a problem in many developed countries and some people believe that a tax on fast food would reduce the problem. Do you agree?

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Poor nutrition and overweight is
a
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issue
 in several wealthy nations and some individuals think that a tax on junk
food
 would alleviate the
issue
. I totally disagree with
this
 statement because
this
 trend can have a negative impact on
local
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econmoy
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economy
 of
countries
,
however
, I would like to recommend some measures to tackle
this
issue
 including,
encourage
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the restaurant
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restaurant
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restaurants
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 to make healthy
food
, and
raise
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 awareness among
public
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the public
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. On the one hand, I
strognly
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strongly
 believe
impose
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 taxes
in
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on
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 fast
food
 can
a
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harmful consequence on
local
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the local
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 economy of
countries
. To illustrate,
impose
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 taxes on junk
food
 can discourage people to purchase it.
Therefore
,
sells
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sales
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 of local
restaurants
 in industrialized
countries
 will decline, which
mean
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means
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 local
restaurants
 will struggle financially.
Furthermore
, many employees
on
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in
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 these
restaurants
 will lose their jobs.
Consequently
,
rate
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the rate
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 of poverty among people in rich
countries
 will increase, which
mean
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means
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 more poverty
mean
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 more crime.
On the other hand
, I would like to suggest some solutions to
mtigate
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mitigate
this
issue
. The first effective solution, the government could introduce regulations regarding
of
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unhealthy
food
.
For example
, the authorities could motivate
restaurants
 to reduce the amount of fat in their
food
 and increase the amount of healthy nutrition namely, vegetables. The second efficient measure,
government
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the government
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 could launch educational campaigns in order to raise awareness among
public
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the public
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 about eating too much junk
food
.
For instance
, the UK government organize plenty of educational programs about
dangers
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the dangers
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 of unhealthy
food
 in school and universities.
To sum up
, I completely disagree with
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the ideal
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ideal
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idea
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 of
implement
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implementing
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 taxes on fast
food
on
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in
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 developed nations because it can have
adverse
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an adverse
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 influence on
local
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the local
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 economy of
countries
 ,
however
, I suggested some actions to overcome
this
 problem
such
 as,
incentivize
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incentivising
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restaurants
 to make healthy
food
, and raise awareness among
public
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the public
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.
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