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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. Discuss the benefits of this development and problems associated with it.

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Nowadays, students are taking some time after schooling and joining in university is becoming popular. They will learn by practising, what they learnt from circular, for
this
 will be a good option for them. In
this
 ,way they will get advantages and disadvantages as well.
Moreover
, pupils are having a good period deciding to do what is next. On the one hand, in the fast-paced world, many people are coming out of school without proper goals, for these types of educationalists need to take a year to get clarity for choosing a good career. Mostly, everyone cannot bear the fees for
further
 studies. They have to work for savings to continue learning.
Additionally
, work experience gives more knowledge to choose better academics. On
other
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 hand, those who already fixed to study in higher education,
additionally
, have enough funds to pay fees, no need to wait for a long duration. If some people consider some time, they cannot continue
study
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 after and they will adjust
in
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 small jobs not worrying about
future
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.
Finally
, taking a gap between schooling and university education completely depends upon
individuals
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 comfortability. For some ,educationalist
this
 will be a good opportunity to learn new things and for ,some
this
 will be a disadvantage.
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