the chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. the table shows the salaries of theanthropologists in work after five years.
The given pie chart represents the destination of anthropology
graduates
from a specific university and the table below shows the gathered data on salaries of this
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fields’
graduates
after 5 years of working in 3 various work sectors.
Overall
, most of the anthropology students found a full-time job after finishing there
tertiary education, Replace the word
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, considering the table, spending 5 years in 3 different catagories
of work most of them had a high amount of income.
A major number of anthropology Correct your spelling
categories
graduates
, recording 52% chose a full-time job, following that, 15% of them found a part-time work
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part-time work
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, 12
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and 12
of
did not find a career. 8% of these Change preposition
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graduates
entered full-time postgraduate studies and there is no data available on the path which
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that
Finally
, 5% of the graduates
chose to have a part-time job in addition
to postgraduate studies.
Considering the table below the pie chart, the named field graduates
had 3 different types of career
, including freelance consultant, government sector and private companies. Among these Fix the agreement mistake
careers
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freelance consultants and government sector employees seem to possess better salaries after 5 years of working, Add a comma
,careers
by
80% of income higher than 75000$. 10% of Change preposition
with
graduates
who worked for private companies had a range of income between 25000$ to 49.999$, 35% of them between 50000$ to 74999$, 25% of them between 75000$ to 99999$ and 30% of them recieved
amount of salaries more than 100000$.Correct your spelling
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