Some feel that governments should prioritize healthcare instead of other important areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
opine that
healthcare
is a crucial factor that
government
have to pay attention
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others believe that
government
should give
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equal or more weight
on
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another areas
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other areas
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. I agree with the
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statement. On the one hand,
healthcare
is
important
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part of
the
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healthier society. It is observed that
people
would be less economically burdened if
government
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the government
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should prioritize
the
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healthcare
. It would be making more convenient and cost-effective for
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public to
checkup
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at
hospital
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the hospital
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.
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,
the
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financial support from the
government
in medicines, treatment and surgery
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is
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a
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low-cost
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with
a
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best service that will
affordable
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to
people
.
Hence
, the
government
should
helpful
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to provide financial support
instead
of bearing
them
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total cost.
On the other hand
,
government
investment should not be limited
within
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the
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healthcare
services. Education is a key factor for the
government
to receive another fund, it provides long-term development of the whole nation to receive funds that will be distributed to public facilities.
For example
, primary education should be free, and provide
subsidy
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subsidies
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to higher secondary students who are under
poverty
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line.
However
, public facilities
not
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only beneficial for
citizens
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citizens'
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daily life but
it
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should improve
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economic growth and higher standards of living. Apart from
the
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education, it is
also
suggested that taxpayer’s money should be utilized in public services, which will improve the investment and career opportunities for the
people
.
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, public transport and
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of
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road
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roads
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should be improved, so that
public
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will opt for it. In conclusion, I believe that allotment of
government
funds should be divided equally or more on society as a whole,
although
importance
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the importance
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of
healthcare
is not underestimated.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal healthcare
  • preventive medicine
  • public health infrastructure
  • social determinants of health
  • fiscal allocation
  • government expenditure
  • gross domestic product (GDP)
  • life expectancy
  • pandemic preparedness
  • health equity
  • social safety net
  • holistic approach
  • non-communicable diseases
  • cross-sector collaboration
  • socioeconomic status
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