Outlining Ms Martin's situation and antecipated needs following her return home tomorrow

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in Charge District

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Service at the Greenville Community Centre 88 Highton Road Greenville 16 July 2017 Re: Margaret Helen

Martin

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DOB: 25 July 1935 Dear

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in charge, I am writing regarding

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Martin

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's case, she was admitted to our facility

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Angina followed by Angioplasty procedure. She is now ready to be discharged and will require pos operative care management and support.

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Martin

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was assessed by the cardiology team and underwent a surgery procedure. Dispite her medical history of several conditions related to heart disease, the surgery went as expected. During the nursing management care,

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Martin

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was able to recover well post operative, tolerating intakes.

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, she has bruises on the catheter site, it is clear from signs of infection.

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Martin

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expressed a bit uneasy about returning home, which highlight the question on wheather she will be able to cope with the recovery process at home.

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had additional support from a Dietitian, which was already referred by the doctor, and

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a Physioterapist, who created a plan of 15 min walk exercices per day.

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, she will need regular visits from the

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to monitor other conditions that might appear, related to surgical wound.

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care plan include receiving regular monitoring by the specialists, it is crutial to have regular

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visits to monitor the adherence to pos-operative instructions on medication, exercise and food intake. Please note that

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is probably experiencing social isolation, caused by the lack of family participation and she

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feels anxious about health, with tendency of focus on the problems rather than solution to the issue. Sincerely,

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

278 words

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Outlining Ms Martin's situation and antecipated needs following her return home tomorrow

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Parents should encourage children to spend less time studying and more time doing physical activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? What are the effects on family life and society?

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?