The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.

The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.
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The bar
chart
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compares the number of males and females who took four different evening courses in 2009, and the pie
chart
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illustrates the
age
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profile of these attendees.
It is clear that
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significantly more
women
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than
men
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took evening classes at the centre.
In addition
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, we call tell that evening courses are more popular among elderly adults.
According to
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the bar
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, drama, painting and language courses, all attracted more
women
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than
men
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to the education centre in 2009. Language classes had the highest number of participants
overall
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, consisting of 40 female and 20 male
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,
while
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the painting
class
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was
also
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a popular
class
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for both genders, attracting 25
men
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and 30
women
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. Interestingly enough,
while
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female attendees were more than male
students
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in other classes, the sculpture course had more
men
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than
women
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students
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, taken by 10 males and 5 females. Referring to the
age
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profile pie
chart
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, we can see the
class
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mostly consisted of people who were 40 years old or older. To be more precise, 42% of the attendees were over the
age
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of 50, and 26% were aged between 40 and 49. Younger adults only made up a small proportion of
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class
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, with 11% of
students
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aged 20 to 29 and 5% aged under 20 of
age
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, age, women, men, students, class with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attendance
  • participant
  • adult education
  • distribution
  • proportion
  • engaged
  • trend
  • mid-career
  • popularity
  • speculate
  • job-oriented
  • creative courses
  • leisure aspect
  • enroll
  • correlation
  • inclined
  • career-oriented
  • hobby-related
  • literacy
  • technical skills
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