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The table shows UK residents' visits abroad by country of visit from 2004 to 2008, Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows UK residents' visits abroad by country of visit from 2004 to 2008, Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table shows information from 2004 to 2008, how many UK residents were abroad in five different
countries
: Egypt,
India
,
Poland
,
Spain
, and the
USA
.
Overall
,
Spain
 is most popular than the other four
countries
, and the second most popular
country
 is the
USA
.
Firstly
, during most of the period,
Spain
 was the most popular
country
. In 2006 the
number
 of
people
 who
visit
Spain
 reached a peak at nearly 15,000 compared to the
number
 of visitors to other
countries
,
Spain
 has the highest
number
.
Secondly
, Egypt and
Poland
 had a similar
number
 of
people
 who access in 2004, but after 2004, the
number
 of
people
 who
visit
 the two
countries
 gradually differed. In 2008 the figure who
visit
Poland
 was around 1,500 compared to Egypt only 664.
Finally
Add a comma
,Finally
show examples
 between 2004 and 2007, the
number
 of
people
 who
visit
 increased significantly in
India
 compared to the figure of
people
 who access fell gradually in the
USA
.
However
, the
number
 of
people
visit
 in the
USA
 still more than in
India
. In conclusion, from 2004 to 2008,
Spain
 is always the most popular visited
country
 in the UK and the
USA
 was the second most popular. In 2004
India
 was the third most popular
country
 in the UK, but in 2006,
Poland
 become the third most popular beyond
India
 until the end of the table.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, india, poland, spain, usa, country, number, people, visit with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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