Although many people value their public parks, this space could be better used for other purposes such as residential areas for the ever growing population or to develop business and boost economies. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, the constantly increasing population creates more residential and economic requirements which is raising a concern that more accommodations should be built or used for business and boost economies

instead

of building public

parks

. I personally disagree with

this

thought for the reasons provided below.

To begin

with, during the tremendously escalating population, there are lots of skyscrapers, high-rise buildings and houses built which mitigate the greenery in cosmopolitan cities.

This

leads to a lack of interaction among

people

with mother nature that affects humans' mental health badly, especially for the poor ones. To illustrate,

people

need a place

for relaxing

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to relax

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and

breathing

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breathe

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the fresh air after a long day of work. In

this

case, rich

people

can come to many entertainment centres,

however

, the poor ones can only choose public

parks

as their most suitable choice. If there are not any

parks

,

then

people

might have rare places for entertaining themselves and their families, which may cause depression and stress for residents of cities.

On the other hand

,

Parks

are

also

a place for

people

to arrange social activities for connecting with their friends or bonding with their family.

For instance

, nowadays, residents almost don’t have much time for leisure activities so they often

chose

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parks

for the short time

gathering

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gatherings

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.

In addition

,

parks

give

people

the sense of being in nature with the ecosystem including plants, trees and biodiversity with many small creatures. In these situations, public gardens play an important role in human life and encourage

people

to have tight relationships. In conclusion, I believe that public

parks

are extremely important and must not be replaced for any reason. They are valuable in human society to provide social places and contribute to residential mental health. Governments should find other solutions to boost economies and solve problems related to accommodation.