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Today the internet has replaced traditional books as a sources of information.do the advantages of internet outweigh the disadvantages?

#internet #books #sources #information
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present
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 time the
internet
 has replaced printed
books
 as
a sources
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a source
sources
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 of
information
.
Although
this
 trend can
brings
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 demerits namely, unreliable
soruce
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source
 of
information
 but I believe the merits of using
internet
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the internet
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 as a
sources
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source
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 of
information
 exceed
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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 because it affordable, comfortable, and eco-friendly way to get
information
. On the one hand, the primary drawback of using
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internet
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 is
main
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soruce
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source
 of
information
 is reliability. To illustrate, there are many online websites
spread
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 fake news in order to catch
attention
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the attention
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 of
people
.
For example
, some online websites claim they find a new drug for cancer in order to promote their products.
In contrast
, physical
books
often
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are often
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 written by professional
people
, which
mean
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traditional
books
 are
more
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a more
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 reliable
source
 of
information
.
On the other hand
, I would like to argue the benefits of using
internet
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the internet
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 as
source
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a source
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 of
information
 significantly more than
downsides
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the downsides
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. The primary advantage of
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the internet
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internet
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 is
provide
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information
 for
free
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a free
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 or affordable
price
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prices
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, which
this
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can encourage
people
 to read more
books
 and newspapers.
Furthermore
, online
information
 is
convenient
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a convenient
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 way to get
information
.
This
 is because via computers
people
 have access to
plently
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plenty
 of
information
 from their homes.
Therefore
,
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internet
 can make
people
are
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more likely to expand their knowledge about a wide range of subjects. Environmentally-friendly way to get
information
 is another benefit of using
internet
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the internet
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is
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as
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source
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the source
a source
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 of
information
.
This
 is because online
information
do
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 not need to
printed
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be printed
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 on
papers
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paper
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, which
this
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can contribute to
mtigate
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mitigate
 deforestation.
As a result
, less cutting forests mean
protect
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ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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 .
To sum up
,
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this
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using
internet
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the internet
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 as
source
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a source
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 of
information
 can bring downsides
such
 as
,
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unreliable
soruce
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sources
 of
information
but
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I think the upsides of using
internet
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the internet
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 as a
sources
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source
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 of
information
 greater outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 because it affordable, comfortable, and eco-friendly method to get
information
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.
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