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Today the internet has replaced traditional books as a sources of information.do the advantages of internet outweigh the disadvantages?

#internet #books #sources #information
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present
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internet
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 has replaced printed
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a sources
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 demerits namely, unreliable
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source
 of
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 but I believe the merits of using
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internet
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 as a
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 of
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 exceed
drawbacks
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 because it affordable, comfortable, and eco-friendly way to get
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. On the one hand, the primary drawback of using
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internet
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main
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soruce
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source
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 is reliability. To illustrate, there are many online websites
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that spread
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 fake news in order to catch
attention
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the attention
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 of
people
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.
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, some online websites claim they find a new drug for cancer in order to promote their products.
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, physical
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often
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 written by professional
people
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, which
mean
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traditional
books
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 are
more
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source
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 of
information
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.
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, I would like to argue the benefits of using
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internet
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 significantly more than
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. The primary advantage of
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internet
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 is
provide
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information
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 for
free
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a free
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 or affordable
price
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, which
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can encourage
people
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 to read more
books
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 and newspapers.
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, online
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 is
convenient
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a convenient
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This
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people
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 have access to
plently
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plenty
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information
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 from their homes.
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,
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internet
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people
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are
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more likely to expand their knowledge about a wide range of subjects. Environmentally-friendly way to get
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 is another benefit of using
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internet
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is
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source
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 of
information
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.
This
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do
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 not need to
printed
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 on
papers
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, which
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can contribute to
mtigate
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mitigate
 deforestation.
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, less cutting forests mean
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ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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using
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internet
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source
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 of
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 can bring downsides
such
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,
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unreliable
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sources
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but
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I think the upsides of using
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internet
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 as a
sources
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 of
information
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 greater outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 because it affordable, comfortable, and eco-friendly method to get
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information
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