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The number of homeless people is increasing in many major cities around the world. What do you think are the reasons behind this? What measures could be taken to solve it?

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Nowadays, a lot of the main cities consider homelessness’s population rising around the world. These cities have economic problems that lead to more
people
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 living harder.
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, the
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 has effective measures to reduce unemployment. In
this
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 essay, I will explain the main problem and show a possible solution to homelessness around the world.
Firstly
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, many
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 have different views about the gravity issue of the homeless population in urban
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. In recent years many
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 accepted a large increase in immigration. These
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 can study and
work
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 abroad.
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Australia permitted immigrants from other
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 peoples
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 COVID
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those
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 can
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many
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 places and same
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Australian
citizen
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 but if these
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work
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 in other
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 place of
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 employment.
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, many
people
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 can not
work
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 because there are not enough
work
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 placements available. In fact, Australia has a tense economic situation.
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, there are some ideas for decreasing the number of unemployed
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. The
government
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 should understand why
people
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 can not
work
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.
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, not having enough skill, experience or education. So the
government
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 can make public facilities for
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 not working.
According to
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 human resource, management researchers said if someone had
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 experience in their life they would have
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for
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 change their life if they have a chance.
To sum up
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, many
countries
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 have decreased economic growth
due to
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 the pandemic.
This
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 issue is related to
people
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 losing their income and living harder. But the
government
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 must make a decision to change and help them live.I personally believe that many
people
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 have to help each other and the
government
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 should help them.
Submitted by Andrea Barreto on

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