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I many countries, people are living in a throwaway society where things are used for a short period and throw away. What are the causes of this and what problems does it lead to?

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The illustration presents an overview of the key states involved in the manufacturing of cheese in the three main steps namely ingredient preparation, processing and packing. The whole processing of cheese starts with raw milk and bacteria enter a process called
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dilute acid esterification which enables the products to be transformed chemically. Once these have been acidified, it is added to the enzyme in order to solidify.
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, curds are smashed with a view to making them into smaller pieces.
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 high temperature, followed by they are drained before moving into the next steps. After that, salt is combined with the mixture before going into the next shaping step so as to make the product have the desirable design. Once
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 followed by fermenting in 2 months.
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, a penultimate stage which is
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 packaging stage is carried out. It
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 leads to the final step of the process where the merchandise is delivered to shops.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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