The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.
The diagram illustrates how West Park Secondary had changed over the period of 60 years since the time of its
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1950.
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main road and a
playground
remain unchanged,
while
there are some main changes, including the expansion of a
school
building, the addition of some new facilities, and the demolition of residential areas. In 1980, the main road in the north of the
school
was accompanied by a
playground
. On the left of the
school
, some houses were constructed above
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large farmland. After 30 years,
while
the main road and the
playground
remained unchanged, some houses were demolished to make room for car parking. The
school
building got expanded
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two parts - one was a science block, and the other was the main building. Another change that took place was the farmland convention into a sports field. Over the next 30 years, the
playground
was reduced in size to make room for a small sports field located nearby a car park. The expansion of the parking, which increased threefold in size and was constructed in the location of the sports field in 1980, was a considerable change. Other structures were unaltered from 1980.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.

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