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The government should control the internet to reduce cybercrime and ensure safety of users. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Cybercrimes are a matter of great concern in today's world, and the argument as to whether the
government
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 should control the internet to reduce cybercrime or not is a major one. I personally believe that the
government
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 is doing what it can regarding the cyberworld and its respective crimes and in the following words I shall be stating how. 
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, the
government
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 is very important when it comes to rules and regulations, even more so when it comes to administering whether they are being followed or not. Despite that, there is little that the
government
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 can do to control whether they are followed as they should be. Individuals of a country are men of free will and intend to use the same to its full extent.
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, even though the law states for access to certain true crime websites needs a minimum age of 18 or above, there is less supervision as to whether the age limit is being followed or not.
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, the internet is an irony in its entire existence, it brings the whole world together, yet privacy is highly maintained when it comes to the person who accesses it. Even though the governmental bodies may be successful in solving cyber crimes, many of the cybercrimes exist without them being known even to the involved persons' families. To illustrate
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, a study conducted in 2007 concluded that there were, in fact, triple the number of crimes that went unnoticed, monthly. Drawing conclusions, I think less of the possibilities of the governmental power doing anything more to broaden its horizon when it comes to safety in relation to the internet. In the years to come, the
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 may gain more control, but so will the vastness of probabilities of the world wide web, rendering everything useless against it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • curbing
  • illegal activities
  • hacking
  • identity theft
  • distribution
  • censorship
  • infringement
  • freedom of speech
  • stifle
  • creativity
  • enhance
  • protection
  • personal data
  • privacy
  • regulations
  • data handling
  • storage
  • surveillance
  • trust
  • encryption
  • anonymizing technologies
  • initiatives
  • international collaboration
  • cyber threats
  • joint efforts
  • evolving
  • regulations
  • loopholes
  • exploited
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