The chart below shows how much money is spent in the budget on different sectors by the UAE government in 2000.

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Presented for consideration is a pie chart detailing figures for the expenditure of a country. The units are calculated in billion.

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, it can be seen that spending on Social surveillance AED took the largest area,

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Transport AED was spent the least.

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, figures for Other expenditures AED were the same. Looking at Social

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AED, Transport AED, Health and personal social services AED and Education AED in

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detail, expenditure on Social

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AED, which led position at $100B,

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was nearly twice as Health and personal social services AED

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is followed by $38B of Education AED. Contrary to Social

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AED, Transport AED occupied the humblest region with $9B. Turning to the remaining data, figures for Industry, agriculture & employment AED; Law and order AED; Housing heritage and environment AED ranged from $13B to $17B.

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, it is recorded that there were two similar spending on Debt interest AED and Other AED, which both accounted for $23B, followed by Defense AED with $22B.

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The chart below shows how much money is spent in the budget on different sectors by the UAE government in 2000.

Because of the global economy, many goods including what we use as daily basics produced by other counties have to be transported for a long distance. To what extent do the advantages oufweigh the disadvantages?

Art is considered an important part of a society as well as an expression of its culture. Do you think that it is important for children to be taught art? Do you think children should be encouraged to focus on art rather than other objects?

In the past, museums stored information about culture and history. However nowadays, this information can be found through internet, therefore is no need for museum. What do you extent agree/disagree?