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Some people think a simple lifestyle can preserve the environment, while others argue that technology itself can solve it . Discuss both views and give your opinions

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It is often said that maintaining our planet is the paramount role that every single individual must take into consideration. A few folks believe that having a basic way of living can sustain the environment;
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, others visualize that modernization will save it. I agree with the first view and put my points as follows.
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 with, having a non-luxurious activity does not mean that you are not living full of life,but you can have both natural resources and precious lives.
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, living in a rustic area
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 their sheep means that they are not greedy.
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, they are not extending local fields, so protecting the climate.
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, simplicity leads to being good with habitat, retaining the wildlife and forest in tandem, and
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 but not least they are using public transport and cycling rather than using their own cars
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 preventing climate change problems.
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, with the advent of technology, more areas have been invaded. To illustrate, mankind produces crude oil both offshore and onshore which is, in turn, threatening marine and land life.
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 the advancement of automation and greenhouse places to produce non-organic crops has caused air pollution by emitting a plethora of fumes into the atmosphere. What's more, there are a huge number of passengers who commute annually by aeroplane which pollutes the air. All things considered,
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 technology has brought massive convenient appliances;
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, it has a detrimental effect on our natural resources. I believe the more life is simple, the better environment we have.
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, less ground will be used, so wildlife will be alive forever.
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