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Some people think that too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings, so we should knock down old buildings and build modern ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often suggested that the government and society spend too much
money
 to look after and repair old
buildings
.
Furthermore
, it exists the opinion that these old
buildings
 should be demolished to build modern ones
instead
. I strongly disagree with
this
 point of view, as I believe that these old
buildings
 are like memories from the past we should try to It is often suggested that nowadays a huge
amount
 of
money
 is invested to repair and maintain old
buildings
, but
instead
, they should be demolished to build new
buildings
 with new construction. I personally believe that old architecture,
as well as
 modern ones, should get an equal
amount
 of many because of some reasons below.
To begin
 with, behind every building stands a history. In my opinion, we should not just destroy the architecture and the history connected to it.
Therefore
, maintaining the old
buildings
also
 means protecting the history and cultural heritage.
For example
, in Granada exists the Alhambra which is an old palace complex built during the ninth century. The Alhambra is a symbol of the impressive monuments of Islamic architecture in Europe during the Middle Ages. Another point to consider is that these old
buildings
 are considered tourist attractions which can count as another source of income.
On the contrary
, I agree that at the same time, an equal
amount
 of
money
 should be spent on new
buildings
. Currently, we are facing a major housing problem. In Italy
for example
 a lot of students can´t find an affordable apartment. There aren´t enough apartments which is why a lot of students live with their parents until they are married. Not only students are facing these problems but
also
 families who now live in little apartments with their children and can´t afford the rent for a house. In conclusion, my point of view is that we as a society should spend an equal
amount
 of
money
 on repairing old
buildings
 with historical value but
also
 on creating new
buildings
 with new structures to make affordable living space possible.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Preservation
  • Restoration
  • Demolition
  • Architectural heritage
  • Cultural significance
  • Tourist attraction
  • Urban landscape
  • Sustainability
  • Conservation
  • Economic benefits
  • Historical landmarks
  • Urban renewal
  • Infrastructure
  • Maintenance costs
  • Modern amenities
  • Building regulations
  • Community identity
  • Heritage conservation
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