Many people argue that eating junk food has led to an unhealthy lifestyle. This problem has become more common among young people these days. Do you agree or disagree that junk food is the cause of the issue?
Some opine that snack food is the main cause of a destructive lifestyle. I strongly disapprove of
this
statement as we will still be fine with a limited intake of Linking Words
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kind of food and the biggest source of Linking Words
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problem is the hustle of life.
My first argument is that eating junk food in moderation is still healthy. Linking Words
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to say, nibbling on a bit of a snack each day doesn't pose any significant adverse effect on your metabolism. On top of that, some fast foods don't contain a high rate of sugar and preservatives, Linking Words
thus
they are completely safe for our bodies and even benefit us physically and mentally. Linking Words
For instance
, dried fruits are highly consumed in the Vietnam market Linking Words
due to
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also
the fact that they stimulate the endorsement inside us.
On top of that, fast-paced living affects the human lifestyle more. Linking Words
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is because nowadays people engage too much in their business, leading to less time to take care of their daily routine. Linking Words
As a consequence
, they often neglect to prepare their meals and participate in physical training and over time, their life quality gets damaged. Linking Words
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according to
a survey about working hours of young from 21 to 25 years old in Hanoi, more than half of them were reported to not be able to balance their life since they are stuck in a rat race with nine-to-five jobs, returning home, they still have to take part in English or soft skills classes, leaving them with only 8 to 9 hours in leisure to sleep.
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To conclude
, snacks themselves don't actually lead to unhealthy living. The reasons are the harmlessness of consuming them in a small amount and the fact that a tight schedule is even more problematic.Linking Words
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task achievement
The essay presents a clear stance and generally maintains this view throughout. To enhance your argument further, consider expanding on how exactly the balance of 'limited intake' can be achieved by individuals.
coherence cohesion
While your paragraphs are well-organized, ensure each paragraph flows smoothly into the next. Connecting phrases could enhance your logical structure further.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, providing a solid framework for your argument.
task achievement
The examples used, such as the dried fruit market in Vietnam and the survey of young people in Hanoi, are specific and relevant, supporting your points effectively.