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the graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Swedan, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

the graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Swedan, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The presented graph provides information about a comparison of carbon dioxide deduction per individual in terms of various years in four different countries. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it's readily apparent that half of the examined countries faced up increasing trends,
while
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 the other half experienced a decreasing tendency in
this
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 matter. Meanwhile, With the exception of
Sweden
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, in the other 3
countries
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 we can observe
gradual
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a gradual
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 rise and drop but
Sweden
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flactuation
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fluctuation
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 over the given period. As is illustrated by the graph, Portugal was the country which accounted for over 2 tons in 1967 but experienced a steady decline within 40 years period and constitutes approximately 6
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. Same
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 Portugal, Italy
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also
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 experienced gradual growth. Indication of emissions in Italy, which amounted
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 more than 3
tonnes
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 in 1967, increased slightly and reached roughly
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8
tonnes
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 in 2007.
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,
Sweden
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 and the United Kingdom saw a
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substantial
 decrease over time. Indication of the United Kingdom accounted for nearly 12
tonnes
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 in 1967,
decreased
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 consistently
under
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 10
tonnes
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 in 2007.
Sweden
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 reached a peak in 1977, thereby a decline during the remaining years was inevitable. Based on the sharp fall
Sweden
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 finished at less than 6
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, which is equal to the amount of
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Portugal at its maximal value.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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