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Some people think that the benefit of running a small business is to employ family members. What are the advantages and disadvantages of running a family business?

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Today, there is an issue of whether to have an insight into the benefits of small
businesses
 with family or not .Some people would suggest that embarking on a career with family
members
 is more profitable , especially a small one.
However
, My personal attitude toward
this
 is that some
businesses
 need to export people to solve many problems, and believe that working with family has more drawbacks than advantages.I will outweigh both sides of
this
 issue. One point which I personally believe that in favour of running a small
business
 is that of requiring specialists, in many societies there are many jobs that are really hard , especially for women who need academic requirements which are the basis of some jobs.
For instance
, in many
businesses
 related to computers
such
 as programming CNC machine codes you need to employ well-informed people who are really experienced because one mistake in operating milling machines will result in an enormous disaster, if in a
business
 especially the small ones, you employ the
members
 of your family who do not experience and have not any problem-solving skills, I believe that it will result to close that
business
.
However
, embarking on a
business
 has many benefits with
members
 of the family.They will respect your job and attempt to make the goods with higher quality.
For example
, in some potential jobs like shopping which do not need any experience ,family
members
 can be chosen as the best choice since they prefer to work long hours and will try to make their better version of working.
To conclude
,
although
 running
businesses
 with family
members
 has many benefits on some basis, they will be led to many disasters, because, they may not have any experience in some majors.
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task response
In the introduction, try to present a clear thesis statement that outlines your position on the issue to establish a strong foundation for your essay.
coherence cohesion
For coherence, consider using more linking words and phrases to connect your ideas and ensure a natural flow throughout the essay.
task response
In the body paragraphs, aim to provide more detailed examples and explanations to support your points more thoroughly.
coherence cohesion
The essay contains an introduction and conclusion, which helps in organizing the ideas clearly.
task achievement
You have identified both advantages and disadvantages of running a family business, addressing the task requirements.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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