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Some people think international car-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution; however, others think there are some other ways. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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As many large cities around the world become increasingly crowded and polluted, applying
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days
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 is an optimal method to mitigate
air
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 pollution. It is often claimed that the only viable solution to
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 crisis is, yet there are some people who suggest trying another way. In my opinion, there is no justification against developing
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days
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, since it is the best remedy. On the one hand, exhaust fumes from a volume of vehicles are the main-driven factor contributing to
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 pollution, outweighing any single industry. One of the reasons for
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 is emissions from cars contain a relatively high proportion of pollutants
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 as CO2,
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 other harmful gas.
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,
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 quality will worsen at an alarming rate as there is no stop sign for global warming. By having some
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 without cars on the road, no hazardous smoke will be released into the atmosphere.
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 policy would be extremely effective in big cities around the globe if
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 scheme applies in reality.
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,
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 would have a greater impact on society, there are other methods that help to tackle the issue.
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, the local government has a leading role in encouraging residents to use public transport in lieu of private vehicles, as it produces a small number of pollutants and it is less likely to damage the
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. More importantly, the authorities could create laws related to industries or factories,
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 as legislating strict controls on production numbers. It,
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, limits the carbon emissions which can be utilised in production. In conclusion,
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 some people argue that it is
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 that would help to mitigate environmental abuse, I personally believe that it is better to consider other solutions to tackle the issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • emissions standards
  • renewable energy
  • environmentally friendly
  • public transportation
  • pedestrian zones
  • commuter behavior
  • awareness
  • incentives
  • air pollution
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