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(Sofia) Some people like listen to music while working or studying. Others find that they need silence to focus. What is your preference? Why do you find the other option unhelpful?

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Scientists are constantly searching about how to amplify the human brain, an example of
that is
 the hypothesis about the power of
music
,
however
, they do not have a conclusion. Nowadays, many students and workers use techniques to improve performance, productivity and memorization,
although
 the preferences are subjective. In my opinion, they have benefits and drawbacks to working and studying by listening to
music
, even though I prefer listening to
music
.
Firstly
, the practice of listening to
music
 is extremely popular, and
as a result
 of that, there are millions of searches and views on social media for Lofi songs, classic
music
 and beats for concentration. I tend to agree
that is
 proven
this
 technique is working for plenty of students around the world.
According to
 individuals and scientists, they have many benefits to listening to
music
, sometimes the activities of studying and working are extremely stressful and boring,
as a result
 of that songs reduce stress, improve your mood, and develop your creativity and the background noise.
However
, some people prefer not to listening
music
, they need silence to focus on tasks.
Therefore
, it depends on the type of
music
, if they have lyrics, they probably will get distracted because the brain recognizes the lyrics and they do not focus on the task. As far as I am concerned,
this
 situation can be considered a disadvantage. In conclusion, my preference is to listening
music
, since I feel more motivated and less stressed, improves my mood and it is more helpful because distracts me from the background noise.
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