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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?
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In recent years, the method used by
people
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 to communicate with others has changed
due to
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 the
development
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 of
technology
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.
This
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 essay supports that it is a negative
development
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 because of two reasons, a reduction of real-life
interaction
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 and an increase in the risk of exposing personal
information
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. The choice
people
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 made, using
technology
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 as a new media to conduct their social life, may reduce physical
interaction
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 between humans since the new
development
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 of
technology
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 allows
people
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 to communicate distantly using their mobile devices.
People
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 will have less desire to get out of their door to have an in-person meetup with the person they are interacting with.
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, my mother used to have a friend meeting once a week to gossip. When they all got phones, the meetup became texting over phones.
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, the new
technology
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 decreases
people
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's desire to have real-life interactions. The new
technology
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also
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 exposes our personal data to danger. As far as I know, though the companies declare that their protection for the users' is incredibly strong, there are still thousands of hundreds of data leakage happening every hour.
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, I read a news about a small communication company's server centre that was cracked by hackers, and approximately 500 clients or users' personal
information
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 got stolen and sold to different buyers, which includes scammer companies and other criminals committing illegal activities. It is proved by the example that important
information
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 may be in danger when using
this
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 new way of
interaction
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.
To sum up
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, the
development
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 of the new way is a negative
development
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 as it causes a reduction of physical
interaction
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 and puts our personal
information
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 in danger.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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