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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

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Nowadays, the
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 divided to be able to
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 and the
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 that would be important if it was not shared will help to classify them into the appropriate sorts. Some people think that it would be good to
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 as much
information
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 as possible in scientific research, business, and the academic world,
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 others consider that some
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 is too important or too valuable to keep and not
share
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. I think that to
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information
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 with scientific research, business, and the academic world, it must first be very important to do that.
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if the
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 is important and could have more negative consequences if realized,
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 it is best not to
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 it. With the impact of the sharing of
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 in scientific research, business, and the academic world, it will not only be useful but
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 cause international growth. The countries that are developing and stuck
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 having restrictions in the sphere where, in order to develop at the appropriate stages, they will get good impacts because of the international connections and the
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 that would be possible to
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 with those countries. Sometimes, sharing
information
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 that relates to the dangerous disadvantages of the sphere where it could cause bad negatives to develop or survive in the section where it intends to
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 some
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 there.
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, The
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 important to be not shared will cause it to survive other sections of the sphere where  actually there is available to
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information
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.  In conclusion, I consider that
information
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 that needs to be shared or not shared in that case would be good if classified, and
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 in that case, I would accept the decision if it is worth sharing it or not.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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