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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the contemporary era, the number of inhabitants has been increasing day by day globally. Many countries have consisted of a high number of mature
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 rather than older
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. From my perspective, it brings more benefits for society than its drawbacks. On the one hand, there are many advantages for some countries and
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 influenced young
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 which contributes workforce;
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 nations’ economy has increased rapidly.
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, youngsters are stronger than older
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, who can work flexibly and update their knowledge with the help of older
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 and they can surgical easily on Earth.
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, nowadays technology has been increasing very fastly so young
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 are working in different sectors. With increasing technology, workers have simply saved time.
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, a survey by TOI - Time of India, in China shows that many young
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 are working very flexibly and strengthful rather than the elderly.
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, there are many drawbacks for older
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 in some countries. First of all, older
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 are more experienced than young
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;
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, young
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 are growing their knowledge.
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, they can address any problems and difficulties in every situation as they have experienced every situation in the past,
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 in the present they tend to be more receptive than younger.
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, in a survey conducted by TOI - Times of India, they have written that 70% of older
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 are more successful than young
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 in many fields. In conclusion, it seems to me that having a large young population than an old crowd has numerous advantages, and there are no others who can take the young
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's roles in supporting the development of a country in the near future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • innovation
  • skilled labor
  • social development
  • technology
  • dividend
  • competition
  • resources
  • social welfare
  • unrest
  • instability
  • healthcare
  • elderly care
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