describe your leisure time and give your opinion about positive side and negative side to have too much leisure time.

All we wish for at the moment is for some
leisure
time
to appear in
life
. Well, that I can relate with. I relate to it every single day as to me it seems as each moment goes by and all the expectations from
people
just pile up onto my shoulders, I wish that I can just escape far far away from all
this
stress, where I can do what I want at that moment. My rule for free
time
is simple. Do what comes to mind at the
time
. Generally speaking though, I would read some comics, scroll through social media, boot up Netflix or the easiest, tries to sleep. All these
activities
may seem predictable and generalized, but in
truth
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it reflects my personality and thoughts in subtle ways. When you take a look at these
activities
in depth,
we
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can identify how almost all of
it
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tries
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to detach me from the real world, whether through fictional universes, the virtual world or a dream. In short, these
activities
help aid me in forgetting about the stress and pressure that comes from existing and living in a modern world. It can be interpreted how
this
reflects the insecurities and fear that I hold for simply existing, the pressure that I have to succeed and truly live,
instead
of rotting away as an empty husk. Detaching
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from the
life
I'm living makes me feel at peace as in those other worlds, I'm just a bystander
instead
of having to make decisions that would play a vital role in determining where my
life
is headed next.
However
, my own experience can never speak for the masses, so for other
people
, the things they associate with enjoying
leisure
time
may be different.
Instead
of myself, they may like to eat, play sports or listen to music and that's perfectly fine as it's these characteristics that make each of us unique. In fact, there are positive effects in engaging in these
activities
as well, where scientific research has been conducted and proved that having a bit of
leisure
time
in each of the experiment
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life
have helped contributed to
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better efficiency at work or school. Not only that, it's in these moments that, in my opinion, help builds and deepens the bonds and relationship with other
people
around us, leading to a more enriching experience
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life
. That's not to say that having too much
leisure
time
is a good thing
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, as I am
also
a victim of
this
. Too much
leisure
times
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can do more harm than good by distracting us from responsibilities. It's important to take breaks of course, but to completely disregard one's role in society and live in a delusion of constant dopamine from
leisure
times is a behaviour that isn't acceptable, from my own point of view. Living like
this
can
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to a vicious cycle where one's procrastination takes over, preventing any productive work to be done and having harmful consequences on the financial and mental state of the individual leading them to be economically dependent. In conclusion, having a break and taking a few days off have been proven to have positive effects on
alot
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a lot
of aspect
on
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one's
life
, but in my opinion,
people
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to know the limits of breaks and be strict with
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to avoid a depressing cycle of sloth and procrastination that can affect them and
people
around them.
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