The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
In the modern day,
science
role Change noun form
science's
on
improving quality of life is inevitable Change preposition
in
hence
it is agreed that the main goal of
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apply
it
should be Correct pronoun usage
apply
along with
human life enhancement. The following reasons Change preposition
apply
on
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in
this
essay supports
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support
this
statement.
Firstly
, to start with the medical advancement, the vaccines and the medicines play a tremendously vital role on
pursuing a healthier community, Change preposition
in
For instance
during the covid
breakdown all of the drug companies aimed Correct your spelling
COVID-19
for inventing
the vaccine and recruited all of their staff toward it. Change preposition
to invent
Furthermore
, healthcare providers saved a huge number of population
so that they survived Add an article
the population
this
pandemic. As a
result
once more the medicine proved Add a comma
result,
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its
it's
main ability to enhance Correct your spelling
its
Correct article usage
apply
the
health.
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apply
Secondly
, in this
new era
people are getting used to newer devices constantly which Add a comma
era,
obviosly
Correct your spelling
obviously
made
lives easier,Wrong verb form
make
hence
the ultimate goal is to improve quality
of Correct article usage
the quality
lives
. Fix the agreement mistake
life
For example
, Tesla got wellcomed
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welcomed
among
people for its Change preposition
by
assisstance
, Correct your spelling
assistance
imagininng
a driver on narcoleptic Correct your spelling
imagining
fall
asleep Replace the word
falling
while
driving and the Tesla save
his life by driving and parking in a safe place. Wrong verb form
saving
Hence
, devices must generally be provided to people for their improvement.
In conclusion, I reitrate
that the core idea behind every science should be human Correct your spelling
reiterate
reiterated
lives
advancement, as Change the noun form
life
such
from medical and technological prospectives
.Correct your spelling
perspectives
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grammar
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evidence support
Ensure that any claim made is well-supported by detailed examples or evidence. Provide more detailed context or evidence for your examples, such as specific studies or statistics about medical advancements or technological improvements.
breadth of coverage
The essay covers both medical and technological aspects, which shows a good understanding of how science can enhance quality of life.
structure
You have successfully structured your essay using an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which enhances the clarity and coherence of your response.
relevance of examples
The examples provided, such as the development of COVID-19 vaccines and Tesla's automation technology, are relevant to the topic of improving people's lives.
Your opinion
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