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Band 4

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the modern day,
science
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science's
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 role
on
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 improving quality of life is inevitable
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 it is agreed that the main goal
of
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it
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should be
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along with
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human life enhancement. The following reasons
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this
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supports
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this
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 statement.
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, to start with the medical advancement, the vaccines and the medicines play a tremendously vital role
on
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 pursuing a healthier community,
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 during the
covid
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COVID-19
 breakdown all of the drug companies aimed
for inventing
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 the vaccine and recruited all of their staff toward it.
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, healthcare providers saved a huge number of
population
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 so that they survived
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 pandemic.
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result
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result,
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 once more the medicine proved
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it's
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its
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 main ability to enhance
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apply
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the
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health.
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, in
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era
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 people are getting used to newer devices constantly which
obviosly
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obviously
made
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make
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 lives easier,
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 the ultimate goal is to improve
quality
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the quality
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 of
lives
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life
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.
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, Tesla got
wellcomed
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welcomed
among
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by
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 people for its
assisstance
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assistance
,
imagininng
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imagining
 a driver on narcoleptic
fall
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 asleep
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 driving and the Tesla
save
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 his life by driving and parking in a safe place.
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, devices must generally be provided to people for their improvement. In conclusion, I
reitrate
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reiterate
reiterated
 that the core idea behind every science should be human
lives
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life
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 advancement, as
such
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 from medical and technological
prospectives
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perspectives
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.

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grammar
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy, such as proper punctuation, especially commas and periods. Additionally, watch out for subject-verb agreement errors and article usage.
evidence support
Ensure that any claim made is well-supported by detailed examples or evidence. Provide more detailed context or evidence for your examples, such as specific studies or statistics about medical advancements or technological improvements.
breadth of coverage
The essay covers both medical and technological aspects, which shows a good understanding of how science can enhance quality of life.
structure
You have successfully structured your essay using an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which enhances the clarity and coherence of your response.
relevance of examples
The examples provided, such as the development of COVID-19 vaccines and Tesla's automation technology, are relevant to the topic of improving people's lives.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • enhancing
  • quality of human life
  • advancements
  • medicine
  • healthcare
  • scientific research
  • solving societal problems
  • improving living standards
  • global issues
  • climate change
  • food scarcity
  • technological advancements
  • limitations
  • negative consequences
  • ethical considerations
  • sustainability
  • environmental preservation
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