Some people think that more money should be spent on protecting endangered species while others think it is a waste of valuable money. What is your opinion?

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Some think that money spent on the protection of endangered
species
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is a wasteful expense
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others think that it should be spent. In my opinion, expenses on protecting these
creatures
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should be done because it helps in a better food chain and environment, and it would save animals and other
creatures
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for our future
generation
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. Expenses on the protection of endangered
species
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have a positive effect on our food chain and better surroundings.
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, if endangered birds, animals and others
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saved
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their prey would increase in number and it would have a negative impact on our environment.
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, if algae-eater fishes would become extinct, there would be a huge amount of algae in seas, rivers and lakes, and
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, water would not stay good for human consumption.
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, our next
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would not be able to see these extinct animals and birds, if they are not saved.
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to say, it is the responsibility of the current
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to save beautiful
creatures
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so that the future
generation
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can live in pretty surroundings.
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, if blue
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saved
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our descendants would never be able to see these fish in their lifetime.
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, in my opinion, monies spent on saving these
species
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are required. In conclusion, some think that expenses on saving endangered
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are
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a wasteful expense
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others believe that it is necessary. In my opinion, it is not a wasteful expense because it would lead to better food- chain and surroundings, and humanity, in future, would be able to see these beautiful
creatures
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.

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