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Studies show that many criminals have a low level of education. For this reason, people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison so they can know when they leave prison. Do you agree or disagree?

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Unemployment and poverty are indisputably the major reasons for
crime
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. Providing vocational
education
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 to prisoners inside penitentiaries would definitely reduce joblessness and destitution.
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, I disagree with the
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statement that providing
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 to inmates is the best way to reduce
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. it is a good method, but there are other better methods to curb
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.
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 with, the main purpose of prisons is not just to punish
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 to rehabilitate them if
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 rehabilitation part is not looked into,
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 the majority of
criminals
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 would re-offend after coming out of prison.
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criminals
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 are not accepted by the general public, and nobody likes to give their jobs.
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 just educating them is not enough to reduce
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. The government must ensure that they are given jobs to fend for their basic needs. Another important fact, which has to be considered, is that these penitentiaries are very costly to maintain. When these inmates are taught vocational skills
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 as carpentry, a lot of infrastructure is required.
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 expenditure may help a few prisoners,
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it may be futile in the case of those hard-core
criminals
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 who are not in there because of illiteracy or unemployment. Their trust has a criminal bent of mind. They would never become useful members of society even after
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education
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. Rigorous imprisonment would be better to deter potential
criminals
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. The best way to reduce
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 would be to never let it happen in the first place. Laws should be enforced so strictly that people should think a hundred times before resorting to
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. Compulsory primary
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 should be given to all children. Youth unemployment should be dealt with by creating job openings or by encouraging entry pre ne u rs hip.
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, it can be reiterated that
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 educating the prisoners and trying to make them self-sufficient would be good
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crime
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, the better methods would be to stop
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 from happening in the first place.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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