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More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems overreliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution.

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Nowadays, the life
people
 live would be impossible to describe without
transportation
.
Cars
 have a special a live role in their
owners
. More and more
people
 are relying on their
cars
 as their major means of
transportation
. In my view, if
cars
 deserved the respect of their
owners
 like their
owners
 expected from them,
then
, in that case,
owners
 would continue to rely on them as their unsubstantiated means of
transportation
. Time by time, modern
cars
 get
such
 modernization that their safety increases to a high level.
Then
 it impacts making the car with the capability of high quality by their producers. Because of the high-quality advances, it will
also
 be environmentally friendly. After all these options for
cars
,
people
 will increase their
relying
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 on them.
Cars
 represent a comfortable atmosphere. which influences their
owners
 to rely on them. If they reduced their excess of comfortable boards,
then
 there would be less intention of relying on
by
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their owner for their
cars
. Sometimes uncontrolled adaptations of private
cars
 are another reason for
this
 problem to arise. In
this
 case, it would be good if the government could set up special rules that would solve the problem that
people
 suffer from. In conclusion, with the variety of options in order to solve
this
 problem,
people
 will decide to take the solution that best to solve the issues on which it is tented them to rely on their car. If
this
 issue delays for a longer time,
then
 there would be a good option to do if the government encourages
people
 to leave their private
cars
and
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instead
 of it to enthusiast them to use public
transportation
.
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