the map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton , and planned future development of the site.

the map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton , and planned future development of the site.
The two figures below depict the movement
development
of Norbiton Industrial from the present into the future. The present map shows an area with 8
factories
built with rivers in the north and a farm in the west. Meanwhile, the next
development
illustrates more
buildings
and facilities. In general, the site plan has changed. Future
development
will have more housing
buildings
than before.
Firstly
,
the
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present map, factory
buildings
became more dominant. It has 8 areas specifically three
factories
around a belt and five
factories
across the street.
In contrast
, in the future
development
, there are many
development
. Not only housing, but they will build other facilities like playgrounds, schools, medical centres and shops. The factory build will be destroyed and no more
factories
there. The area will become a house for employers. They will build seven housing. One building is across the river which is beside the farmland, another is separated. Three
buildings
are close to the playground, school and medical centre. The
last
three are in the first exit of the second round. They are beside the river.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words development, factories, buildings with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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